is my first poem for you.
Is it good? Does it rhyme?
Is it obvious? Sublime?
Does it flow?
Where does it go next?
Should I make the meter neater?
Work some franšais dans la text?
Am I rambling on and on and on?
Or am I a mite terse?
At least I didn't try to say "I love you" in light verse!
-- Lannie Rose
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